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Sunday, 29 May 2016

My Short Story

communicate precise meaning related to the topic (Year ⅚)
Use basic punctuation that is mostly correct. This includes capital letters, full stops , commas, question marks, exclamation marks, apostrophes and speech marks. (Year ⅚)

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My Story...


THE SHIP
Once there was a a 21 year old boy in the forest.The boys name is Anakin. He is all alone in the forest.He is felling sad because when he was young his family left him.Ever since he alone in the forest .He has no house .He has been looking for things to make his house out of.It was getting late so Anakin went under a big tree to sleep.

The next day Anakin was a wake.He got some vines for string and some bark for wood .Then Anakin was starting to make a hammer. When he was done he went to get somethings for the tree that he was under for the night.When Anakin got back to the tree he had some pieces of bark off a tree.

Anakin started to making a tree house. Anakin also had some vines to tie the wood with.His hammer is so sharp that in the big trunk of the tree he made a door .He started digging out the inside of the tree.

Suddenly a big noise crashed on the ground. Anakin did not know what it was. Until he saw smoke up in the air . So then he went to go look. Anakin won't forget where his tree is because Anakin's tree is the biggest tree and the tallest tree in the forest.

When he was strolling around Anakin saw a space ship in the ground. Suddenly the weather changes there is a storm coming.

The next day Anakin went to where the space ship is. The storm went away. At end Anakin looked in the space ship and then he lived happy every after since he found someone in the space ship he meet someone in the space ship and Anakin will never be alone ever again.The person in the space ship was a girl named Lucy she was not that shy.







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